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    Re: writing thread

    All right, here's a piece I've been refining for a while, and I think I'm happy with how it is, for now at least. Comments, criticism, and interpretations welcome.

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    Remind me how to stand again
    I'm sure I can't on my own
    Tracing lines you've left to find
    Chasing your trail alone

    Even though I feel this way
    I'll believe what you say

    Hopefully

    Sleepwalk my way
    Through your daydream
    Footsteps are broken
    All lead to the sea

    Light splinters through
    Tears in the seams
    Distill memories
    From these reveries

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    Remind me how to stand again
    I'm sure I can't on my own
    Tracing lines you've left behind
    Chasing your trail alone

    Even though
    I feel this way
    I'll believe
    What you say

    ====================

    Treading through the fallen petals
    Oceans drawing nearer
    I see the wind run through the trees
    But can't feel your breeze on me
    Last edited by Sever; April 6th, 2009 at 11:04 PM.
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