Quick-Crit 2010

[ICEE]

I made a thing I guess. Anyone know how to rip sounds from unreal?

[Rentafence]

Stabbing himself doesn't look all that natural. All he does is move his wrist back. Needs more shakiness like it actually fucking hurts.

[ExAm]

Have you ever had a needle stuck in your arm? You don't want to move during that shit. Only makes it a lot worse.

[Con]

New stuff should be posted in the Quick-Crit 2011 thread. I'll leave this open for now for crit on what was recently posted.

[ICEE]

I tried to make it look painful with the fist clench, but maybe that wasn't enough. I also experimented with making him shake with nervousness beforehand, but it didnt seem evident enough exactly what was going on, and then it sort of detracted from the seizure/spasming that happens once the eve settles in. A lot of people have also told me that the injection needed more force, but it seems to me that if I'm injecting a vial of mystery goo into my vein, I would at least do it carefully and precisely.

[SnaFuBAR]

The clench comes at the wrong time (should be a moment after the needle goes in) and there's too much movement the split second before the needle goes in. you're going to want to keep the left hand as still as possible while pushing a needle in.

[Corndogman]

I say keep the left hand completely still right before it goes in, and give the fingers a slight twitch when it goes in. Then clinch the fist after he pulls it out.

[LlamaMaster]

Please crit.

[Tnnaas]

I think the tip needs to be a little more defined, being a carrot and all. Aside from that and where the stem meets the root, it looks perfect.

[Nero]

Wrong thread? lol