Quick-Crit 2010

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Originally Posted by thehoodedsmack

The second panel could be changed to imitate the scene where the inception crew boards the plane: Cobb giving the team the thumbs up, everybody set and ready to go, then his reaction in the third panel has more effect. A fourth panel would also be helpful in that case, with a view of the plane from the outside, clearly showing the NASA logo.

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The problem with this is that the punch has to be on that panel for it to have the effect I want. There can be no panel after that panel, or it breaks the flow. The first idea is good, though.

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Originally Posted by Cagerrin

put a tiny Nasa logo on somebody's shirt in the last panel instead?

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This is a much better idea. I'll probably put one on the inside fuselage somewhere or on hawking's jumpsuit.

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Originally Posted by DEEhunter

The last panel needs more indication of whats going on.
Have a few windows or some generic plane props. If I was to see that panel alone with no context, I would think they are floating around a slanted room.

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Then really you're not very observant. The second panel makes it clear they're on a plane. I did some research and it looks like vomit comets do have windows, so i'll put those in.

my first proper drawing

one of these days I'm gonna turn furaffinity into my own purrsonal goldmine ok!

A++
That will go right on the fridge.

can we keep the crit kinda serious, I'm really trying to learn to draw here!

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Originally Posted by Sel

can we keep the crit kinda serious, I'm really trying to learn to draw here!

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here's a really helpful tip. start off with pencil and paper. Depending on what you want your style to be like, pick up a few how to draw books. start off with cartoons/anime and move towards more realistic style.

llama, i swear, if you're going to do hanging wires you better have like 10+ variations that look nothing alike. repetition of wires = scene death

oh look I finished it

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Originally Posted by Sel

oh look I finished it

*tails2*

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Colouring is just horrific. D:
You have random light colour to darker shade in random places that makes absolutely no sense.

on the other hand, you're defining the character more and look alot better than the original. keep at it, but I still recommend traditional over digital for beginners.

learning to draw, day 2

Am I bad at this?





I've only been trying to work with sub-d for a few weeks as a pass-time activity, but I'd like to know if there's anything strange about how my wireframe is being setup, or if I'm making common mistakes. Also, should close edge-loops be avoided?